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The Cycle of Many Lives
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The Cycle of Many Lives

 

Inkling down a yard of time

And filtered through pinpricked space

A wave and a particle

In the folds of shifting thought

That now moves into corporeal cages

 

The light of glowing eyes

Burning the mists of illusion

Outreaching to faces that turn away

To the deceitful horizontal landscape

Hiding from the ladder of experience

 

A world of turning possibilities

Reduced to improbable chances

Holding on to collective monotony

Stagnating, woven threads of minds

In a magnetised reality

 

Fewer consciously changed lives

So a family of realists

Condemned by ridicule,

Yet in defiance of ignorance,

Are returning to a pure spring source

 

Colliding between the barriers

Parameters broken to coloured dust

An archetypal blueprint quakes

Disturbed from inherited slumber

And awakens a spark of truth

 

Winding up narrow paths

Moved by the intensity of focus

For transmuting the chaos to calm

Mirroring in reflected images

The holograms of both sides

 

Connecting the strand-filled web

That lifts beyond the silt of eons

Flying on a mindful creation

And responsible for owning acceptance

In space-timeless wholeness
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#2
It's so true and vivid.  I am shocked by the precision in the meanings... You're a creative genius!
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#3
I go into a different state of mind for writing song/poems, and the words just flow as translations from a worldless, infinite energy.  First I feel, and then I write!

Maybe I'll add some song lyrics too - not just poetry.  I am very interested in feedback though.
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#4
I like this poem...I think you can make it into a song lol..maybe like the way band Delerium sings poems...with worldly instruments...or maybe make it a techno song but I don't know if techno songs are healthy for all of us to listen to(I personally like techno...but I know we have to wear UVP).

I think if I really wanted to investigate the meaning and go deeper into it..have a more profound understanding...I might want to paint,draw or visualize your poem....

thank you....:o)
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#5
I originally wrote this as a song, but I haven't made up my mind yet if I want to add music...
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#6
I think it'll be cool if you make it a song, because it may be a soothing song from the chronological lyrics.  Also, considering the already powerful vividness, music will add another dimension to the expression.
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#7
Hmmm..  I think I agree with you!
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